Below is the post-workshop revision plan that I included with my submission of the conference draft:

Based on my peer reviews and conversation with the instructor on Tuesday, I have tried to modify my starting position to make my argument more compelling. I am now attempting to prove that Wiz Khalifa strives for a Powellian representation of Pittsburgh but his music video for “Black and Yellow” is too simplified to be adequate. This suggests that the archive may actually be doing damage, as per Eggener’s objections, with having one, overarching example of experiences to characterize a region.