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Section 4: Case Study

Case Study: Final Draft w/ Commentary (Non-revised)

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Final Draft (Non-Revised): Case Study

Commentary:

“Teddy, Your case is more specific and detailed, which allows you to better set up the argument that follows. As before, your numerical work is compelling and well-argued. There are still some places for improvement/revision thought:

*Some paragraphs tend toward long explanations without many sources (see the first paragraph in the “Background Info” section, for example)

*Some sections lack concrete, specific connections to the section before (see the beginning of your “Spotify’s Help…” section)

*Your conclusion doesn’t account for all the compelling the work you’ve done above.”

Megan McIntyre, Mar 1 at 8:44pm
Section 4: Case Study

Case Study: Conference Draft w/ Commentary

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Conference Draft: Case Study Draft

Commentary:

“Megan McIntyre: Be specific. Give me a timeline/timeframe.

Megan McIntyre: If you want to give specific, useful background on the service, begin here.

Megan McIntyre: Be specific. Give me a timeline/timeframe.

Megan McIntyre: If you want to begin with the most compelling story, start here.

Megan McIntyre: This isn’t the most pressing place for revision, but you have a tendency toward long, complicated sentences. Read this sentence aloud for clarity.

Megan McIntyre: Who is the source here?

Megan McIntyre: If you’re going to include section headings, consider ones that are more descriptive.
Megan McIntyre: Can you be more specific here about what kind of impact? Positive? Negative? Mixed? Impact on what specifically? How artists make music? How they sell it? How much control they have?
Megan McIntyre:

You need a specific, significant transition here.”