Final Draft (Non-Revised): Case Study

Commentary:

“Teddy, Your case is more specific and detailed, which allows you to better set up the argument that follows. As before, your numerical work is compelling and well-argued. There are still some places for improvement/revision thought:

*Some paragraphs tend toward long explanations without many sources (see the first paragraph in the “Background Info” section, for example)

*Some sections lack concrete, specific connections to the section before (see the beginning of your “Spotify’s Help…” section)

*Your conclusion doesn’t account for all the compelling the work you’ve done above.”