Hey! Just wanted to let you know that you’re project is coming out nicely. I noticed some grammatical errors, for example in the A vender y trabajar section with words such as “lumpier or tneh.” Overall nothing that proofreading one more time would not help with. I love the website appearance and the story is so interesting. I love the break down of the pages by sections with specific titles. This makes it easier for the reader to see the transitions in the person’s life as the story progresses. You are doing great and I cannot wait to see the final project.
Thank you so much for your feedback! I had not seen those mistakes! I really appreciate it. I have a quick question, do you think I should keep the stories she tells me or should I condense it a little more? Thank you so much!
I’m also really excited to see the final product! I love how detailed the story is, it’s really helping the voice come out quite nicely. The use of pictures is very nice, they aren’t too overdone or distracting so they complement the story very well. I also like the way your introduction sets up your relationship with your aunt. It provides a good context and adds credibility for your use of the first person in your narrative. Also the glossary is a very smart choice I wouldn’t have ever thought of that but I will probably end up using it myself! (Thanks!)
As far as criticism I can’t really offer much other than what has already been said. You’re doing a great job so far!
Metzli, I think your project is beautifully done. I love the stories you tell and the way you have described them. The pages are aesthetically pleasing and I think you have an appropriate balance of text and photographs. You should be pleased with your work.
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