I love the theme you chose for your project. The style is simple and modern. The smaller text suits your longer passages, though I’d still work to find some images that break up the text. I also like how the side navigation shows themes that accompany each section, like “Adolescence: The Cycle of Poverty and Violence.” I would find a theme to accompany Childhood in Mexico City, perhaps something about gender roles since that’s what your text focuses on? Also remember to add the final sections to you title menu, as it’s missing the last page on the Mexican Economic Crisis. Your prose is strong and draws the reader into the story. If possible, it would also be cool to add a media gallery since you have easy access to family photos.
I’m sure as you add onto your work the page will only improve! If you have any questions, feel free to contact me.
Best,
Leandra
Hey Daniela,
I really like how your project is coming along. I think the minimalist look works for your style and the writing. It looks cleans! I especially like the titles that you’ve given to the existing sections.
I think it would benefit you to include more media, so that the audience can get more of a feel for your Dad’s personality.
Its looking great!
Kudos,
Jessica
Dear Daniela,
Echoing Leandra and Jessica, I think that you are really off to a great start. Your father definitely opened up to you and we gain insight into his life in Mexico City. I look forward to reading about his migration and transition into the U.S. This still needs to be incorporated into the oral history.
Three things I suggest for improvement:
1. Consider incorporating more photos. While simplicity is good, I find the color a bit bland. Give it a little punch of color. I’d consider maps, quotes, and other elements to break up the prose/sections.
2. I like the section on his youth in Mexico and his triumph over poverty. But I do find some of the ideas become redundant. I’d tighten up this section. Also, I think it would be nice for you to reflect more on this idea of “culture” versus “cycle” of poverty in your appendix. The former concept, is analytically problematic in that these ideas have been used to “blame the victim” rather than point towards structure. So, want to have you talk about how you understand this idea.
3. You still need an introduction, transcripts and a section on migration.
Daniela,
I think you’ve done a great job incorporating photographs into the narrative. The framing now looks complete and it no longer looks “bland.” The photos give it just the right touch of color.
I think your father & family will love it. You should be proud of your work!
Hi Daneila!
I love the theme you chose for your project. The style is simple and modern. The smaller text suits your longer passages, though I’d still work to find some images that break up the text. I also like how the side navigation shows themes that accompany each section, like “Adolescence: The Cycle of Poverty and Violence.” I would find a theme to accompany Childhood in Mexico City, perhaps something about gender roles since that’s what your text focuses on? Also remember to add the final sections to you title menu, as it’s missing the last page on the Mexican Economic Crisis. Your prose is strong and draws the reader into the story. If possible, it would also be cool to add a media gallery since you have easy access to family photos.
I’m sure as you add onto your work the page will only improve! If you have any questions, feel free to contact me.
Best,
Leandra
Hey Daniela,
I really like how your project is coming along. I think the minimalist look works for your style and the writing. It looks cleans! I especially like the titles that you’ve given to the existing sections.
I think it would benefit you to include more media, so that the audience can get more of a feel for your Dad’s personality.
Its looking great!
Kudos,
Jessica
Dear Daniela,
Echoing Leandra and Jessica, I think that you are really off to a great start. Your father definitely opened up to you and we gain insight into his life in Mexico City. I look forward to reading about his migration and transition into the U.S. This still needs to be incorporated into the oral history.
Three things I suggest for improvement:
1. Consider incorporating more photos. While simplicity is good, I find the color a bit bland. Give it a little punch of color. I’d consider maps, quotes, and other elements to break up the prose/sections.
2. I like the section on his youth in Mexico and his triumph over poverty. But I do find some of the ideas become redundant. I’d tighten up this section. Also, I think it would be nice for you to reflect more on this idea of “culture” versus “cycle” of poverty in your appendix. The former concept, is analytically problematic in that these ideas have been used to “blame the victim” rather than point towards structure. So, want to have you talk about how you understand this idea.
3. You still need an introduction, transcripts and a section on migration.
Daniela,
I think you’ve done a great job incorporating photographs into the narrative. The framing now looks complete and it no longer looks “bland.” The photos give it just the right touch of color.
I think your father & family will love it. You should be proud of your work!